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and you and me, we got the whole of
Saturday, you and me, we got car grease
streaked straight up to our grins and

let's high five when you triumph over
mom's sneaky nose, her teasing and coy and
i wanna be that kind of wife to a man

like you. i wanna be the kind of woman worth
changing with, sacrificing for, going crazy
over as the years collect in bank rolls of nickels.

i've been called a menagerie of names by
the older, the wiser, the wrinkled; they
call me pretty girl, sweetheart, dollface,

sugarplum as i stir splenda into their
brewed coffees, but they ain't got nothin'

on your horse master hands, the ones that could
whip us all into shape (any shape; triangle,
square, parallelogram) if you were guided by

a cruel whimsy instead of a moral compass because
you know north and even though you live eye level
with the clouds, you always manage to look at

me without condescending or stooping or crouching
down to my level. you know north because you are

north and i am true south, couldn't not be, i keep
company with steam and sticky soundwaves and the Sabine

and i am content

knowing i'll meet you mid-May at the apex of
the rose's needle.
we're gonna have a ball
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jade-pandora Featured By Owner Jan 30, 2014

:glomp: THIS...


I didn't see it before now when I went to read Rachel's poem that has been featured as a DD - that alone was reason for me to celebrate.  But...


THIS!


:+fav:


:heart:

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:iconsleepysheepdog:
sleepysheepdog Featured By Owner Feb 3, 2014
: D. Yes, this is all a herd of lovely things, isn't it? I was so laughingly happy when fuzzat burglar got her DD for that poem. I'm obviously biased, but it was well deserved. Glad you like this one, too. I turned twenty that year and wore my dad's NASCAR hat and didn't wear shoes alllll day. I'm glad I can still remember it with the sumptuous supplement of this poem. I go back to it sometimes. 
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BeyondJen Featured By Owner Jan 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Oh gosh, this is nothing short of amazing and truly lovely.

I'm quite taken with the delicate rambling and all the compass imagery, right down to those perfect ending lines. This is definitely one of my favorite things I've read here. :heart:

Congrats on the very well deserved DD. :D
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:iconarecio:
arecio Featured By Owner Dec 6, 2012
I love the relationship described in this, they seem to click really well. The first person character feels really strong to me. It's super beautiful. +fave
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:iconmellowghost:
mellowghost Featured By Owner Oct 7, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Very sweet piece. It made me smile.
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:iconnnuit:
Nnuit Featured By Owner Oct 5, 2012  Student Writer
this is it
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:iconevranawolfsong:
EvranaWolfsong Featured By Owner Oct 5, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Wow. Your cadence and voice is interestingly done, and it has an awesome feel to it. The words just feel right in my mouth, even without being spoken.
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KittyCyanide Featured By Owner Oct 5, 2012  Student General Artist
This is perfectly fantastic. Wonderful, wonderful work.
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glossolalias Featured By Owner Oct 5, 2012
perfect.
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EchoHasName Featured By Owner Oct 5, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
i am true south, couldn't not be, i keep
company with steam and sticky soundwaves and the Sabine

and i am content



.... Although I keep company with Pontchartrain... I totally understand <3
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xxStolen-soulsxx Featured By Owner Oct 5, 2012
wow, it makes perfect sense.
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:iconxlntwtch:
xlntwtch Featured By Owner Oct 5, 2012   Writer
:iconcongratsddplz: ... :+fav: ... this one put a big smile on my face. Thank you.
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:iconriparii:
riparii Featured By Owner Oct 5, 2012
Ah, this is such a lovely one.
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:iconbrassteeth:
brassteeth Featured By Owner Oct 5, 2012
Yeh, a strong piece and Well Deserved D.D.!!
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:iconneurotype:
neurotype Featured By Owner Oct 5, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
love the enjambment and imagery.
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:iconvespera:
vespera Featured By Owner Sep 18, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Okay, this is amazing. I just have one *tiny* suggestion you may want to consider

"i've been called a menagerie of names by
the older, the wiser, the wrinkled, they
call me pretty girl, sweetheart, dollface" - After "the wrinkled" I'd add a period or a semicolon in place of that comma (which is a comma splice)...

That is all. I am in awe.
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:iconsleepysheepdog:
sleepysheepdog Featured By Owner Sep 18, 2012
Ahaha, you are lovely lovely lovely. And I think, this time, I will take you up on the suggestion and also I'll take the awe and return some bliss.

The more I write, the more I start making up my own punctaution rules (by abandoning them entirely): ).

Thank you thank you, of course.
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:iconvespera:
vespera Featured By Owner Sep 18, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
LOLOLOL :heart:
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:iconarchelyxs:
archelyxs Featured By Owner May 30, 2012
"knowing i'll meet you mid-May at the apex of
the rose's needle."
Wow. :heart:
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:iconsleepysheepdog:
sleepysheepdog Featured By Owner Jun 6, 2012
Mmmmm, compass imagery. My favorite kind. The instrument lends itself to poetry with a wordless grace.
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:iconavalanchepark:
avalanchepark Featured By Owner May 27, 2012
such a great narrative here and the phrasing is so well crafted
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:iconsleepysheepdog:
sleepysheepdog Featured By Owner May 30, 2012
It was a nice nice wonderful day. Best birthday gift I could've gotten.
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:iconfuzzyhoser:
FuzzyHoser Featured By Owner May 21, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
This is quite possibly one of my favorite poems I've been lucky enough to stumble upon yet on this site. :heart:

i am true south, couldn't not be, i keep
company with steam and sticky soundwaves and the Sabine

and i am content


...and as a southerner, I concur. (:
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:iconsleepysheepdog:
sleepysheepdog Featured By Owner May 24, 2012
Mmm. A fellow Southerner. I'm from Louisiana; yourself?

I'm so pleased you enjoyed reading this. If there's one thing I enjoy doing, it's writing a tribute to my father and my beautiful lava pit of a state and also add in compass imagery.

It was a good day. I'm glad I've got the words to show for it.

Thank you thank you.
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:iconfuzzyhoser:
FuzzyHoser Featured By Owner May 24, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Alabama--born and raised. (: I've always wanted to go poke around over in Louisiana. I've yet to travel there. But I always thought the culture of that state to be so interesting.

You've done a phenomenal job on this. Gosh, I want everyone to read it. I think you show the charm of the south so well here, and you certainly done a dandy job with the tribute.

:heart: You're more than welcome, dear.
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:iconriparii:
riparii Featured By Owner May 19, 2012
You had me at car grease
streaked straight up to our grins

and how in love am I. :) What a clanging,
roiling, wonderful poem.
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:iconsleepysheepdog:
sleepysheepdog Featured By Owner May 20, 2012
It was a good day for my Fazzuh and me. We went to Port Vincent and picked up some crawfish and he let me wear one his is sheetmetal worker hats and we talked about Styx Zeppelin Bob Seger and changed my tires.

Thank you thank you.
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