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and you and me, we got the whole of
Saturday, you and me, we got car grease
streaked straight up to our grins and

let's high five when you triumph over
mom's sneaky nose, her teasing and coy and
i wanna be that kind of wife to a man

like you. i wanna be the kind of woman worth
changing with, sacrificing for, going crazy
over as the years collect in bank rolls of nickels.

i've been called a menagerie of names by
the older, the wiser, the wrinkled; they
call me pretty girl, sweetheart, dollface,

sugarplum as i stir splenda into their
brewed coffees, but they ain't got nothin'

on your horse master hands, the ones that could
whip us all into shape (any shape; triangle,
square, parallelogram) if you were guided by

a cruel whimsy instead of a moral compass because
you know north and even though you live eye level
with the clouds, you always manage to look at

me without condescending or stooping or crouching
down to my level. you know north because you are

north and i am true south, couldn't not be, i keep
company with steam and sticky soundwaves and the Sabine

and i am content

knowing i'll meet you mid-May at the apex of
the rose's needle.
we're gonna have a ball
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Given 2012-10-05
:iconjade-pandora:

:glomp: THIS...


I didn't see it before now when I went to read Rachel's poem that has been featured as a DD - that alone was reason for me to celebrate.  But...


THIS!


:+fav:


:heart:

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:iconsleepysheepdog:
: D. Yes, this is all a herd of lovely things, isn't it? I was so laughingly happy when fuzzat burglar got her DD for that poem. I'm obviously biased, but it was well deserved. Glad you like this one, too. I turned twenty that year and wore my dad's NASCAR hat and didn't wear shoes alllll day. I'm glad I can still remember it with the sumptuous supplement of this poem. I go back to it sometimes. 
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BeyondJen Jan 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Oh gosh, this is nothing short of amazing and truly lovely.

I'm quite taken with the delicate rambling and all the compass imagery, right down to those perfect ending lines. This is definitely one of my favorite things I've read here. :heart:

Congrats on the very well deserved DD. :D
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:iconarecio:
I love the relationship described in this, they seem to click really well. The first person character feels really strong to me. It's super beautiful. +fave
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:iconmellowghost:
mellowghost Oct 7, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Very sweet piece. It made me smile.
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:iconnnuit:
Nnuit Oct 5, 2012  Student Writer
this is it
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EvranaWolfsong Oct 5, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Wow. Your cadence and voice is interestingly done, and it has an awesome feel to it. The words just feel right in my mouth, even without being spoken.
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KittyCyanide Oct 5, 2012  Student General Artist
This is perfectly fantastic. Wonderful, wonderful work.
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EchoHasName Oct 5, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
i am true south, couldn't not be, i keep
company with steam and sticky soundwaves and the Sabine

and i am content



.... Although I keep company with Pontchartrain... I totally understand <3
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